Revising with Strong Verbs: Cutting HAD

Revising with Strong Verbs: Cutting HAD

Show, don't tell by cutting HAVE, HAS & HAD and revising with ACTION verbs.

Start your sentence with the thing doing the action!

Multiple Choice

HE HAS SPINNING, RED EYES. Which revision is strongest?

• He has very red eyes. He has spinning eyes.

• His red eyes spin.

• He is a boy with red eyes and a little bit spinning.

Multiple Choice

HE HAS A SCAR SHAPED LIKE A LIGHTNING BOLT. Which revision is strongest?

• His face is scarred with a scar that's a lighting bolt.

• It looks like there's a lightning bolt on his forehead.

• A lighting bolt-shaped scar zigzags across his forehead.

Multiple Choice

SHE HAS STICKY STUFF ON HER ARMS. Which revision is strongest?

• There's sticky stuff on her arms.

• It looks like sticky stuff is on her arms.

• Sticky stuff coats her arms.

Open Ended

REVISE THIS SENTENCE: She has long hair.