Argumentative essay revising & editing

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What makes the claim 'Pro athletes getting paid is taking money away from the team just like how paying college athletes takes money away from colleges' unclear or incorrect?

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Pro athletes are contracted and paid individually.

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What is missing from this introduction? Pro athletes getting paid is taking money away from the team just like how paying college athletes takes money away from colleges. College players won't get paid for risking their lives on the court and field, which is why they get scholarships. Options: quote, hook, background information, thesis.

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thesis

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What is missing from this cited source?

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the title and/or author

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What needs to be changed in this paragraph? #4-6 are from the same essay about why there should be no homework. Firstly, there is a lack of evidence that HW actually helps students. 4th grade students got similar scores to those who did no HW. Homework can cause physical and emotional fatigue.

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The elaboration doesn't match the evidence or the reason/topic sentence.

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What type of elaboration should follow this evidence? "According to AdCouncil, 90% of middle school students admit to cheating when they were assigned excessive HW." Options: description to paint an image of a cheating student, cause/effect to explain how HW can cause cheating, counterclaim to show how this evidence is incorrect, comparison to show how it's similar to other evidence.

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cause/effect to explain how HW can cause cheating

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#4-6 are from the same essay about why there should be no homework. In conclusion, teachers should cut back on the amount of HW they assign. When students get too much HW, they are stressed. On the other hand, there is much evidence that it helps younger children. What is wrong with this conclusion?

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The closing statement changes the focus of the essay.

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How could the closing statement be rewritten in 3rd person?

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changing you to everyone and your to his/her

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The 2nd sentence started the counterclaim. What could have been given/added to answer it and complete the counterclaim?

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list examples of other ways parents can be involved

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In the closing statement, what should be added to make the imagery of a life without homework clearer? Options: listing benefits of doing homework, listing disadvantages of doing homework, contrast with what kids do after school now with homework, specific descriptions of how healthy and happy kids could be.

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specific descriptions of how healthy and happy kids could be

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How could the word choice in the essay about no homework be changed to sound more academic and polished? Options: changing kids to children or students, restating reasons separately, changing homework to academic work, adding a comma after "stress"

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changing kids to children or students